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September 8, 2012

Summer skies drone with
reminiscence

and in the cumulo-pumped
zenith

the engine
++++++++cuts.

Like old light, a delay,
and I scour the blue for
tell-tale blips: there,
yes, a jumper, two, free-
+++++++++++++++++++ fall

++++++++++++++++++++++suspending
++++++++++++++++++++++will.

++++++++++++++++++++++++++++Gravity presses my pulse above
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++GoogleEarth England

++++++++++++++++++++++++++++cheeks ripple,
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ears roar adrenalin,

++++++++++++++++++++++++++++embalmed in now
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++and now, hurtling
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++into next

++++++++++++++++++++++++++++an automaton swing
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++for the cord
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++with a twenty second
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++l i f e s p a n

++++++++++++++++++++++++++++its deafening draft
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++amplified
++++++++++++++++++++++++++++in uprush

++++++++++++++++++++++++++++imminence.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Linking to the Tuesday night round the world poetry read that is Open Link Night at dVerse Poets Pub http://dversepoets.com/

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23 Comments
  1. Patsy stagman permalink

    Forwarded to Megan… Thankyou.

    _____

  2. jumping out of an airplane must be something like being born, or leaving someone you love

  3. whew…there is a nice intensity to this…have yet to jump out of a plane…only off cliffs…..that has got to be a huge rush in doing so….esp the freefall….

    • ha! You’re sounding tempted, Brian… :0

      • oh i have been…had a friend that did it over the summer….and watching his vid i was thinking i could do that…and then my son falls out a tree over the weekend and…i remember gravity can hurt you know…smiles.

  4. That must be an awesome experience!!

  5. Love the layout – love this verse especially:
    embalmed in now
    and now, hurtling
    into next –

  6. Wow, you wrote the experience vividly! It really MUST be a rush….I can really FEEL that strong pull downward in your poem; but I think I personally will pass on this particular experience. LOL!

  7. It’s great to hear those comments – thank you! It wasn’t me jumping, so doubly pleased that I managed to give a sense of the experience… I’m in no hurry to give it a try either Mary. I was the one looking up 🙂

  8. crazy how ones perspective can change
    overnight . . . reading this with new eyes
    makes it a deeper to the mind 🙂

  9. hedgewitch permalink

    You really make this real, Becky–I get to experience it vicariously and *still* panic. As a child I wanted to fly–I think it’s part of those dinosaur bits of DNA in our reptile brains–some part of us remembers that freedom, and we chase it in a myriad of ways–not all so direct and clean as this example–kudos to the bravery of any spirit doing it–and, like you, I’ll watch from the ground, thanks. ;_) My fave line here is “Like old light, a delay…”

  10. that must have been wonderful Becky – such a rush – a friend of mine did it and it was recorded on vid to music – castles in the air – she loved it – your words really made you feel as if in the moments of experience ~ hugs lib

  11. Wonderful poem – sounds terrifying. I love the sense of gap here – silence. Then the overpowering rush of buoyancy. Terrific. k.

  12. Emily permalink

    I never would have guessed you weren’t writing from your own POV. You’ve captured this wonderfully. The rush of freefall… And I really like how the word lifespan is stretched out there. Very cool.

  13. Great to hear all these responses- thanks so much for taking the time.

  14. Whoa, the fall, the insistence of gravity, the wind whistling though the splayed limps, the uprush of that parachute – I felt all that. Well-crafted.

  15. the formatting has it! Well it’s great poetry all round, Becs, but I do love it when you go all-out with your formatting

    • Thanks Luke… and I love it when there’s a clear direction from the piece itself… it felt like automatic writing.

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